Jenn
Firstly, I'm so happy to see a new poem from you :)

The imagery, as always, is fantastic. I love your punctuation, so precise and it leaves the reader breathless. The subtle rhymes in the end worked really well, in my opinion.

"This golden balloon tried to be free...
Only to end up broken... from it's dream."
---My favorite

it's--its
passerby's--passersby
sky's--skies
^apart from a few errors, this piece is just perfect for my tastes.

Keep writing!
-X

Well this was fantastic poem
I love the starting stanza and the ending one so much
they are my favorite in the poem

You used many good images
and your word choice was great except for some small mistakes Xanthe mentioned earlier

also(I can't believe i am talking about this)
your punctuation is so good you never got me lost from your words in this poem

Thanks for posting this
hope to see something new again soon =))