Beautiful piece ;)

5/5

Keep writing!

Wow. Kips, in the first place I like your title "Restore the dead hopes"...you inspires me even in the title itself...

"Spread your wings so wide,
let the dominant wind help
to fly you away."

The beginning part is awesome. Well-penned.

"For the sake of all
beautiful butterflies that
pollinate flowers,"

I like the imagery here. I love how you use beautiful butterflies in the pollinate flowers...very creative:)

"And the green grasses
that yield their perfect fragrance,
as aided by the dew,"

The words of your choice is wise. I can feel here the freshness of nature and the smoothness of your words are very impressive. Brilliantly written.

"let the grasses bloom,
bring dead hopes back to live;
may dreams be restored."

This is my most favorite part of your poem, Kips. I can feel the hope here..I like the way you penned your words here...gush! So, amazing as usual. But, please capitalize the starting letter of your stanza..it ruins the piece.

Tell the deepest sea
and the ocean about the
love that gave you peace;

I like the metaphor of the "deepest sea" that you connect with the word "peace". I like it a lot.

"just as the stars sparkle
and their lights brighten the sky,
may sheer hope endure."

And the ending part has even the impact with the whole piece. But, as I said capitalize the first letter of the first word of your stanza. Nonetheless, I love it in whole. Keep writing more beautiful and fabulous poems, Kips.
5/5-C

I've read double, triple, quadruple, quintuple haiku, but I think this is the first hextuple(?) haiku I've read. Regardless of that, I must say, I really enjoyed reading this one. The imagery is presented well with simple lexis, that in my opinion could've been improved a bit. Such as the word 'beautiful' to describe butterflies, I advice you to choose something less vague. Using those kinds of words make the reader such as myself to ask: how are the butterflies beautiful? What color are they? Are there ugly butterflies?
I guess my point is: be more descriptive. Avoid abstract words which leave the reader confused instead of curious.

"Spread your wings so wide,
let the dominant wind help
to fly you away."

Good start. But the last line here seemed off. 'Make you fly away' or something would be better.

"let the grasses bloom,
bring dead hopes back to live;
may dreams be restored."

live--life
The way you connected concrete nouns with abstract ideas made this my favorite part. It is not that original, but I really like this. I also like how there's no hesitation or uncertainty in the narrator's part when speaking. It shows confidence.

Great ending. A well-written piece, Kips. Keep it up :)
-X

Very stunning. 5/5