OK SO NOW I'M NEW TO THIS SITE AND I NEED HELP GETTING ADJUSTED TO IT.....I WANT ALL OF YOU GUYS TO READ MY POEM AND RATE IT.....................PLEASE DON FORGET TO COMMENT AND ME HOW IT IS

Thanks for your comment
So I am going to be honest I don't really like poems that are forced to rhyme. It has to go smooth and a small account of people can do that.
I think you are holding back all those words you are trying to say because you have this urge to rhyme.

But that's just mine opinion. Keep going on!