Comments : Life's Dark Hole

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Very deep... i know of so many teens that can relate to this. kids are mean, plain and simple. they will say/do whatever it takes to hurt somebody just to make themselves feel superior..some do it to take the attention off of themselves, and other do it just for fun. bullying will always be a case in school, and it's sad. so many suicides and kids who are depressed and suffer because they have to go to school and deal with it everyday. so sorry you had to be one of those kids and contemplate suicide. :( writing is a great release, so good job. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Kids are very cruel this days, they love
    to make themselves look bigger by
    harrassing others and make them look smaller. That's why the suicide rate
    amongst teenagers is so high.
    It seems like these kids have a lot of
    anger issues they might feel sad or lost
    as well, no reason to take it out on
    others. Eventually one day they wil meet
    their match, someone who will fight back
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Max

    Well I never feel this in high school ( in now)
    But I know how does it feel like to be picked on
    It sure feels bad but u should have never thought of suicide as an option at all
    Cause actually they win when you lose hope lol
    Never give up is what you should do if he is more powerful than you then train to be better
    For the poem I think u got some rhyme at some parts which made the flow easier and much better
    You were good at choosing your words too
    descripes the situation well
    I liked the ending but it was so full of depression
    It is sad poem so emotional and hold good message
    And it is well written
    5/5 keep writing =)

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni

    First of all let me apologize, I am sorry that you had to endure this and I wish that things are better now.
    It feels that by being so straightforward about this, you got the strength to fight against those people now. The short verses help for this poem to read well.
    In case you ever need someone, just send me a PM.

  • 11 years ago

    by Wicked Ways

    This is a very deep and meaningful poem, it is also pained.. i can tell the hurt that you felt in high school...but theres stilll many years ahead of you you have to stsay strong.... and you gota remember that there is still life to live, you never know what might happen....thats what so scared about it, you never know..your past in your past....you have a strong future.....you have to make it strong...this is a good piece of poetry..nice work

  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Thomas~
    This is a saddening piece. I can't really relate to it since I've been homeschooled all my life, but this piece made me feel how you felt. Just by reading this, I feel horrible. I'm really sorry you had to go through this; no one deserves this, but I assure you, these little things that bring us down will sooner or later be a huge factor in helping us achieve our dreams.
    These things give us strength and I hope you realize that. Just by knowing, writing and sharing about what you're going through shows your strength. Just hold on and appreciate those things now, because in the future, when you're more successful and more powerful than they are, you'll smile and thank them for making you stronger.
    Suicide is not an answer. You have talent; look at this piece. We could never lose a growing talent like you (:
    Keep your head high, and I aswell, am always here whenever you need anyone to talk to. Don't hesitate to drop me a pm.
    Keep writing!
    -X