Comments : I hate the fate

  • 11 years ago

    by Purple Rose

    Typos: I did not find any actual typos, but one of the sentences/lines did bother me. The line that says "why your dustpin invited my love?" is that supposed to be "was your dustpan invited my love?" or something like that? Because the way you have it doesn't really make sense to me. Just trying to help :) It is your poem...

    I can feel your agony as I read this, Mohan. I am so sorry for that :( I have noticed that this seems to be all you write about in your poems lately - a lost love. If this is indeed true, everything will be okay, there will be someone out there for you one day. Just keep strong.

    Excellent besides that one line...
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Purple Rose said everything I was going to, lol. Anyway, keep your head up! It will get better.