Comments : One Way Ticket

  • 9 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Oh wow! this is Beeeeaaaautiful!

    "But remember my love that
    with the breaking dawn of my
    lonely yesterdays I packed my
    emotions and came to your door."

    ^ i love this " lonely yesterday" ... ive had so many of these it's painful to think about and the thought of going to someone with them to finally be one is just epic!

    "You marked the beginning
    of every new breath I took;
    unknowingly, you set the
    pace for my heart to beat."

    ^ This just made my heart melt!! such a perfect choice of words to describe it,

    Meme I love this piece :-) it seems of late every new piece you write becomes my favorite :-)

    Big Loves for a Big Write


    • 9 years ago

      by Meme

      Yeah, lonely yesterdays suck >_<

      thanks a lot Ben :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Oh my goodness!

    "I tasted the rain coming down
    your face when you thought I
    still have terminals to cross,
    and many stations to pass by."

    ^ I am immediately drawn into the poem!

    "And like those yellow brushes
    of a morning sunshine; I was
    invulnerable, and almost free
    knowing I have you by my side."

    ^ This is just so lovely and powerful a message
    to the one you love.

    "You have loved me like you
    never had before. But its when
    I loved you I realised that in you
    I found the last stop of my life."

    ^The show stopper and such a beautiful one, I am in love with this poem!

    Absolutely stunning piece. It's just become one of my fav. poems.

  • 9 years ago

    by average thoughts


  • 9 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Awww this is such a beautiful poem, and I love how you wrote it. I love the title, it caught my eye, and I like the idea of buying a one-way ticket to someone's heart.. that is so clever!

    The last stanza - perfect ending

    Thank you for writing such a sweet poem for us to enjoy!

    Great job :*