Wow,its so beautifully written..i loved every part of it.
Just few suggestions..use 'and'itself rather than 'n'.i think that sound nice as all others are written in formal english..and on the stanza,These eyes...sees,correct it to 'see'..n typing mistake-infernal,i think u mean 'internal'..everythng else is so perfect..i give u 5/5 *_*

Brilliant! That's all I could say..

OMG I am in tears this poem is SOOOOO GOOD!!!! I will hold your "trembling hands" and "look into your burning eyes' of passion and kill that "feeling of helplessness'!!!! LOVE IT SOOO MUCH!!!! Its now one of my Fav's!!! Keep it up buddy!!

This is such a beautiful love poem!

I do have to say however, using the abbreviation "N" kind of takes the beauty away from this piece just a bit, however everyone has their own style and way of expressing their feelings so I want to applaud you for your originality!

I want to say your first few lines:

"My eyes might be just two,
among the million eyes,
that look for you. "

What a beautiful and fresh way to start this piece off... love it!!