We cannot always be strong, there may come a time where we appear to be weak.
There is no "Good-bye" filled with tears
of joy, it seems so final. Leaving us behind
feeling all alone, looking for somebody,
anybody just to talk to and ease the pain.
Feeling that knot and not able to breathe

That's what I gather from this poem
I could be wrong
sad and so excellent written

I need someone
Anyone will do
But it all comes back to this
To me and you

I like this part of the poem because thats how it goes, back to the person who made you feel this wayy, no matter who is there for you, it still comes back to that one person, this is a sad poem and you can really tell the hurt that was left behind after this person left, how deeply you were hurt. . . . . Nicely written though. :)

Typos: third stanza, last line 'deafning' should be 'deafening.' Just trying to help :)

This is really beautiful, Jenna. I am sorry that I have never read one of your works before :(

The tone in this poem is really astounding to me for some reason...I can sense hopelessness, sadness, and fear as well. I don't know if this is about some external or internal - it is kind of interesting.

'Just a million pieces
Beyond repair
A dance with the devil
In a world without air'

^ I have to say that this is my favorite part right here. Its like you know there is nothing that you can do - you know that you are just going to lose. And how a world without air can be so horrendous...I can only imagine what it must be like to die because you can no longer breathe. Makes me shiver just thinking about it.

Well anyway, I really love this poem. It is good that you have come out of writer's block - Welcome back :)

Excellent
5/5

This is a good poem,

The way, I understood it. It's as if you were the one that looked for problems, perhaps, dug deeper and in return, you found something that was not expected.

So now, you are blaming yourself and you don't know what to do. You want to scream but no sound comes out. You want someone to help but the truth is that you want HiM/HER to help you not anyone else.

I have a hard time understanding : dance with the devil -- as in play, and you will get in trouble or that things might go wrong? or something like that. Then in a world without air... I would have loved it if you could have explain a bit farther how that world looks or how did it became a world without air? I mean, unless that person was the air for you.

Though, I like how those two lines sound together.

And in fact those are my favorite parts of the poem.

Very good.

5/5

Hi Jen hun,

I have missed your poetry. I am glad you have written something new. I always admired your work because I could relate to them so much and this is no different. I think that this poem is awesome and I am sorry that you have gone through something like this too, obviously the loss of a loved one.

I was in awe when you wrote there is no good in goodbye. I never thought of that before and I love that you have made me think of something different.

I think it is so hard when someone leaves us or when a relationship breaks down because we care about them so much that when they're not around, our lives are changed and we feel like we can't breathe.

An awesome write hun, I am glad you are back.

x

Heartbreak stings like nothing else.
But this is the time that you must open yourself to new experiences and new people to fill the void that someone else has left behind.

Good verses for coming out of writer's block ;)

5/5

I need someone
Anyone will do
But it all comes back to this
To me and you..

Sad bt Beautiful, and jenna frm no whr it luks like it hs cum frm writers block..

"Just a million pieces
Beyond repair
A dance with the devil
In a world without air"

The last stanza makes the whole poem. You felt like you have lost the battle and there are no ways of repairing the feelings/love you once had, so you are dealing with it even though you feel like you are being suffocated through the whole process.

Great write!

Oh my how i loved this write!!!!!, the last stanza was my favourite but i looooooved it all :-)

It had a really nice pace fort the reader and i thought that the emotions were portrayed effortlessly.

Seriously great job!!!!!

You were just coming out of writers block when you wrote this? Girl, are you sure you even had it? This is really, really good. The last stanza sums up the whole piece. It says exactly what you mean and it gives it a bit of a bite. Oh how I ve missed you x

This is just beautiful.... I like the tone here and the words used to describe this piece... I just love the way how u effortlessly write stuffs so beautiful:)
Awesome as always