Father,
why can't you see
that I'm not what
you want me to be
and that I'm just me?

- I liked this opening, its one many of us relate to and feel this pressure from our parents through out our life, especially when we are younger growing up.

Father,
can't you understand
that I don't want to obey
every one of your demands?
Your actions I can't stand.
They are as fruitless
as your reprimands.

- Loved the last statement, really well worded.This shows your tiredness of the situation and the pressure on you to change.

Father,
Don't you think I know
about the mistakes you made
and how they haunt you so?

- this makes me curious as to what mistakes he made. It also makes you aware of the fact that everyone has a past and yet they still judge others and try to force them to be someone they are not, in hope to be perfect, when in fact no one is perfect.

Father,
I know you see
your reflection in me.
But I'm not perfection
and I certainly don't share your perception.
I only know that one day
I might give in to this suicidal tension

- REally powerful way to end. I enjoyed reading this because of its flow, it had a beat to it like a rap song would have. I could imagine it being a hit actually. Deep lyrics, good beat.... good job. :)

I don't see someone that looks like me in there.
I see myself in there.

- speechless -

So many will see themselves and have past memories of similar questions they once had. This is well written as many would like their fathers not to mold them into something which they want but rather accept their children for what they are and want to be.

A good message which many parents should learn.

I think that this is a really powerful poem due to how real it probably is. I think that even though you have any right to be mad at him, there seems to be more of a hopelessness and the desire for him to understand how you feel, let you be and support you with what you do instead of complain.

I think that the rhymes emphasized the "soft" tone and the repetition of "father" had a pleading feeling to it.

This is really powerful.

Sometimes parents don't realize that you are going to make mistakes... that it is a part of life and no one is perfect. I think they have good intentions, but sometimes they have too high of expectations.

I can see a lot of people relating to this piece.

Great write!

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I don't know why I'm commenting just now, Thomas. Actually, I don't really know what to say.

I'm not the biggest fan of rhyme these days. I used to write rhymed poetry but I lost patience lol.

This is the most poignant rhyming poem I've read for quite some time in this site.
I am fascinated by people's relationships with others; family relationships, friendships and all.
I can't really relate to this write but this saddened me and made me feel what you are going through (assuming this is written from real experience) and that just shows how powerful this piece is.

I know I don't comment much on your poems, but I always read them. Keep writing :)