Comments : Constricted Bliss

  • 13 years ago

    by Angel

    Your rhyming is very good
    just work on the length of your sentences so it can flow a bit better
    other than that it was very well written :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Angel

    Your rhyming is very good
    just work on the length of your sentences so it can flow a bit better
    other than that it was very well written :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Angel

    Your rhyming is very good
    just work on the length of your sentences so it can flow a bit better
    other than that it was very well written :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Angel

    Your rhyming is very good
    just work on the length of your sentences so it can flow a bit better
    other than that it was very well written :)