Comments : Blue Cascade

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    This is really beautiful. I love your nature pieces. Awesome job..

  • 11 years ago

    by Xanthe

    I love your nature poems. It's inspiring how you could craft beautiful imagery with so little words.

    "I've designed
    a write of elegance
    far beyond a violent sea,"

    I love this. Sometimes we can find/create the most beautiful things (write of elegance) with the ugliest things (violent sea) in life.

    "cascaded miracles with a breathless
    wind rhapsody, just to hear a flowers
    laughter sing with a morning sun."

    I have a few suggestions, you don't have to change this though as it's perfect already..
    The article (a) before flowers should be 'the', or an apostrophe in 'flowers' (flower's) would suffice :)

    "Traced an outline of an imaginary
    sunrise and a blue dawn sky,"

    I love the idea of tracing nature when writing. Poetry is like painting, but with words. If that makes sense, haha

    "where birds
    sore
    within a freshness
    of a captivating dream."

    A little typo on 'soar'. And I suggest the article (a) before 'freshness' be changed to 'the', since it is a specific dream, I assume.

    Overall, this just shows how talented you are with nature poems. The imagery you create just makes the most beautiful images in my mind. Don't stop writing!

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is such a beautiful poem. It is peaceful to read and makes you think of this scene of perfect nature you have described.

    The way you choose your words and manage to group them together to make them flow so flawlessly is just amazing.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    :O

    I LOVE THE TITLE!!!

    You write beautiful nature poems, Andrea, this is one thing that I could read a hundred times and still fall in love with it, still feel all that emotion.

    WOW :)
    xxxx