Wow Thomas look at you, you did a wonderful job. Sometimes it takes another
person to encourage us since they believe
in us. Everlasting is going to be very proud
and so am I

Dude this was nothing short of great!

Great metaphors and you showed real control with your writing....we want more like this ....just raised your game dude well done :-))

Wow, I do agree this is really good.
I really like the flow of the poem, by this I mean how the ideas ran smoothly.

I also like the beginning, haha well actualy, I liked everything. But my most favorite is the part where you mention that instead of exploring other lands, he explore himself.. Though it is sad because he only found darkness and loneliness, but I do think that that's only temporal.

Thank you for taking my challenge, this was really good. It was creative, I like the mentioning of first, second, third cycles... It gives enough time to the reader to analyze the info. See you are good with metaphors and similes. :D

5/5