Chelsea I am very pleased that I was able to read this. You are wonderful! What a beautiful piece of you that you have expressed here! It definitely puts a different perspective on this feeling we call "love".. I love it! Thank you!! :D
I liked how you described love here. With questions, you explained the complexities of love simply. Without saying alot, you got one thinking deeply. How much is one willing to give for the one whom you love? Love is a mutual feeling that needs nurturing like a plant needs water and sun to survive. So, with love one has to be ready for the good, the bad and ugly side it comes up with. As its never a smooth sail, that bond which makes you not to deter is that which keeps you going. You can't be perfect as individuals, but together you can create a habitable union for keeps. Keep on writing.. Kudos!
I love the poem its self however it feels like you have tried to hard to get the shape of the poem and the sentance structure has suffered. There is nothing wrong with the content so a little restructuring and this poem would be perfect.
I've read a few of your poems and I appreciate how your unique line breaks can add to the emotion in a language not spoken. This poem reads smoothly with a hint of apprehension. You have immense potential. Not many can manipulate words so.
FS, wonderful gal... you write so mature sweets... I loved the questioning which are so relatable and gives a glimpse of what love is... truly a beautiful and lovely piece...
7 years ago
This is beautiful indeed Chelsea. It does say a lot too. Love is such a beautiful thing like a flower as you said. But you do bring up a great point/question. Do we still love the person whether we are beautiful or have many problems? . I think the answer is is yes because your heart makes you. It's hard to fall in love as it is but falling out of love is even more difficult. I guess no one can really say what love it per say. We all have our own ideas in our head. The flower metaphor is perfect here though. A flower and love is very fragile already so you do have to treat it with care. This is still a very lovely write. 5