Great narration, Hannah. I love how it flowed so smoothly and the transition of events was not confusing. I also love the subtle rhymes whether intended or not. :)

"Whispering between a lovers fort,"
^
I think lovers need an apostrophe.?

"or my haunting yesteryear's -"
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The apostrophe is unneeded.

I like this. Keep writing!

I thought this was a really incredible write the word choice was perfect the flow was enjoyable to read , I also like the rhyming , intended or not .

A really good style suites you

Well penned

Sorry double posted

Ahhh Hannah, I just love the way you write. You pick the best words to describe the whole picture of your piece.
Its sweet, cute, and captivating. I swear if you write a novel I wont be able to stop reading it!!

Love it <3

Oh Hannah, I love them
midnight rendezvous. It reminds me
of them carefree nights, having fun and
being accepted for the who I am.

Your imagery is always so flawless and this one did not disappoint.

The passion of this piece is beautiful, strong and so vivid!

Love the title. Love the content.
Your story is heartwarming ---
Especially that last line!
Everyone wants that feeling in love!!

5/5

A groan slips through your teeth as I leave my love marks,
claiming my territory upon your neck

- first of all... really?????? how on earth did you come up with this line lol. I love it. This is so powerful and I think it just catches you so much!

The barrier around my heart ruptures
and I'm free.

I finally envisage that you won't judge my lasting foibles,
or my haunting yesteryears -
you understand...
and love me simply for being me.

- This bit is so happy and perfect, it is the way it should be and so lovely to think of it happening. I thought it was a great ending line because I always said when the film "What Women Want" came out and everyone asked the question, my answer is " to be loved for who they are " I think the problems only start when people try to change others or change themselves for others, soI just adore this poem because it is about what I believe in!

Great job :)

I love midnight, I love rendezvous, I'd certainly die for midnight rendezvous lol!

You've got a really beautiful way with words, especially when it comes to love poems. They always pull me in and don't let go of me until it's over and by that time I feel so affectionate due to your poem and find myself reading it all over again. :)

The only thing that I did not like too well is the format, it does not seem as though you've got structure in this poem, but it's not as bad as it may sound.

Anyways, hope to read many many many more!! :)