Comments : Pretending

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is such a sad thought that you have to go through this with your parents, I know where you are coming from and have been there too, but as we get older this relationship changes and all I can advise is to hold onto that.

    Your poem is good but has some punctuation and spelling errors so i have fixed them for you and will leave it up to you if you want to fix it to this way, your poem deserves to be read the way it will have the best impact on the reader.

    We've been pretending that nothing's wrong
    for so long
    that today I can't hold it in
    anymore.
    I want to yell at my parents for getting us
    into this mess,
    it's their fault and it always will be.
    Why can't they
    just live with what they have
    and
    not keep wanting more?
    We're perfect
    but
    they don't see that,
    they don't see me,
    they don't care for me,
    they don't want me.
    Why can't they just see the amazing person
    I can be??