You done well on this one, I like how you used everything around in nature, to help you create a poem of love and romance. The sky and the stars and sun etc are all quite romantic things for couples and you have used them well in creating your images.

I am not sure if vapor should be vapour, as that is how we spell it in UK, but might be this way other places.

Also, In this line... Drawing loves very quite own mystery.... I am not sure what you mean? DO you mean quiet? as in silent? I don't understand it with the word quite, so I assume it is this word you have meant to write?

Good poem, well done