Comments : Bittersweet Shimmer

  • 8 years ago

    by Thomas

    Interwine should be intertwine?

    Nice rhyming scheme you use here, I like that.
    I am guessing that the sun represents a loved one?

  • 8 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I couldn't help but read your first word Twas and then carry on in my head with " the night before christmas " lol. Never really se this word being used in today's language.

    I like how you made the rhyming work here and still kept the flow of the poem without making it flawed with forced rhymes. This was well done.

    I also like how you end the poem with a very deep question which makes me ponder it for a while after reading.

    Nicely written.

  • 8 years ago

    by Xanthe

    This is breathtaking. One of the best rhyming poems I've read in a while, and a very beautiful nature piece. I love the diction you've used and how this flowed with such ease that I had to read this poem aloud. Beautiful.
    Keep writing.

  • 8 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow, reading this poem was like a breath of fresh air. I really loved how it made me feel, and the rhyme scheme made it feel almost like a lullaby. I love the title as well, it caught my eye.

    Loved it! :)