I really love the word choice of this poem, it is so powerful and reading each line had the ability to paint this family portrait in my mind.
I especially love the first line of the poem the transparent tear drop very effective.
5.5 from me

Well this was a powerful 3 part poem, and a beautiful way to end this touching poetic saga... I truly admire the way this flowed, and the emotional message, made me tear up. Tony you have a gift to grip the human heart in your pieces, truly admire that!

One small error I think you would like to be aware of: 4th stanza, 3rd line: know should be no.

I can't stop reading this one... because it truly took me to a moment in life, that needed to be revisited, its really a powerful piece when the reader can relate, maybe not to the full message but parts of it... and that is truly why I adore this poem!

Transparent drops of memories
radically fall from her eyes,
on the back of the portrait,
was her mothers hand writing-

Wow stunning way to continue on from the second part. I like the descriptions.

I can't bare the pain of her loss, I will
love you forever but I never want you
to forget your sister love mummy.

^^ Wow, something I can actually see a mother saying.

As she reads the date she realises
her mother wrote this fifty years ago;
her eyes gazed to the mirror
as she see's , her reflection.

^^ thats something massive to realize and I love how its vivid enough I can imagine how a character would feel.

She see's a young girl,faintly in her reflection
and for the first time she feels freedom,
she has know reason to remain ,as her golden
wings open a smile shines the way to happiness.

^^ beautiful stanza

Finally there all reunited ,
outside heavens pearly gates.

^^ stunning way to end all three parts.

Wonderful piece all three parts. Great writes.

Transparent drops of memories
radically fall from her eyes,
on the back of the portrait,
was her mothers hand writing-

Wow stunning way to continue on from the second part. I like the descriptions.

I can't bare the pain of her loss, I will
love you forever but I never want you
to forget your sister love mummy.

^^ Wow, something I can actually see a mother saying.

As she reads the date she realises
her mother wrote this fifty years ago;
her eyes gazed to the mirror
as she see's , her reflection.

^^ thats something massive to realize and I love how its vivid enough I can imagine how a character would feel.

She see's a young girl,faintly in her reflection
and for the first time she feels freedom,
she has know reason to remain ,as her golden
wings open a smile shines the way to happiness.

^^ beautiful stanza

Finally there all reunited ,
outside heavens pearly gates.

^^ stunning way to end all three parts.

Wonderful piece all three parts. Great writes.

Transparent drops of memories
radically fall from her eyes,
on the back of the portrait,
was her mothers hand writing-

Wow stunning way to continue on from the second part. I like the descriptions.

I can't bare the pain of her loss, I will
love you forever but I never want you
to forget your sister love mummy.

^^ Wow, something I can actually see a mother saying.

As she reads the date she realises
her mother wrote this fifty years ago;
her eyes gazed to the mirror
as she see's , her reflection.

^^ thats something massive to realize and I love how its vivid enough I can imagine how a character would feel.

She see's a young girl,faintly in her reflection
and for the first time she feels freedom,
she has know reason to remain ,as her golden
wings open a smile shines the way to happiness.

^^ beautiful stanza

Finally there all reunited ,
outside heavens pearly gates.

^^ stunning way to end all three parts.

Wonderful piece all three parts. Great writes.

Beautiful write, Tony! (Sorry in advance for the paragraph. Part of it is just your stanzas.)

"Transparent drops of memories
radically fall from her eyes,
on the back of the portrait,
was her mothers hand writing-"

You have no idea how much I love this line. It's well written and brimming with vivid imagery. It really drew me in, and opened my senses, well done.

"I can't bare the pain of her loss, I will
love you forever but I never want you
to forget your sister love mummy."

I'd replace that comma with a period after "loss" and add a comma after "forever". I don't think it will interrupt the flow. Also, I got a little confused because I was unaware that you changed perspectives; quotations would be very useful here. You may need a comma after "love", or you can use a period to signify the ending of the letter.

Nonetheless, I really like that the story was taking an unsuspected turn. Even though I was a bit thrown off, I was still intrigued and wanted to see where this story would go.

"As she reads the date she realises
her mother wrote this fifty years ago;
her eyes gazed to the mirror
as she see's , her reflection."

I just read somewhere that "realises" is the third person singular present of realizes (whatever that means), so you're good. You don't need an apostrophe for "sees" because it's only plural and not possessive, and the last line has a spacing error.

"She see's a young girl,faintly in her reflection
and for the first time she feels freedom,
she has know reason to remain ,as her golden
wings open a smile shines the way to happiness."

You have a few spacing errors in this stanza, and the second is a complete sentence. So, it needs a comma after "reflection". You'll also need a comma after "time" because you need to separate your introductory phrase from your main clause, and "now" should be spelled no.

"Finally there all reunited ,
outside heavens pearly gates."

There should be a comma after "finally", and I don't think you need a comma after "reunited" because outside is a preposition.

I loved the storytelling and that we got to see through the mother's perspective, if only just a glimpse. This was a touching story with a very satisfying ending, and it seems a bit out of your element, since it doesn't seem to be very cryptic. So, I admire your experimenting with other styles. Nice work.

Oh, Tony... this touches me so much. Losing my mother, I know how hard it would be to read something that was written to me over fifty years ago, seeing it for the first time. The feeling of freedom, the feeling of peace... so touching. They are reunited for eternity. <3

Another inspirational piece from you!

Sad sad piece :( I found just a few grammatical errors in here love, know should be no, and a comma needs to break up a few sentences in the beginning.

But the story, my my.. Havent lost my mother, but when I read some of the old cards my Grandma gave me, seeing her handwriting makes me teary eyed...Kinda inspires me to write a poem about it actually.

I love the ending though, you bring hope when describing the reunion of these two in heaven. That just puts a smile on anyones face. Changes the tone of this piece as well.

Well done!

Transparent drops of memories
radically fall from her eyes,
on the back of the portrait,
was her mothers hand writing-

remove the comma after portrait.
- this opening was interesting because you give the reader the tone of the poem being sad because there are tears for some unknown reason and then you give a mystery object of the portrait - so straight away the readers curiosity has to then read on.

I can't bare the pain of her loss, I will
love you forever but I never want you
to forget your sister love mummy.

bare = bear. I think you should also put the speech in brackets here so we know this is the words of the mother. Also put a comma after sister, or put a full stop and have love mummy on its own. Either would work.

As she reads the date she realises
her mother wrote this fifty years ago;
her eyes gazed to the mirror
as she see's , her reflection.

- remove the apostrophe from sees, then also take away the comma after it because I is not needed. The tense here also changes so I would be aware of that, it is very hard sometimes. But you say "reads" "realises" so it is being told in the present tense, but then you say " her eyes gazed to the mirror as she sees" so gazed should be gaze, to keep it to the present tense to match the rest of the stanza.

She see's a young girl,faintly in her reflection
and for the first time she feels freedom,
she has know reason to remain ,as her golden
wings open a smile shines the way to happiness.

- again remove the apostrophe from sees, I don't believe you need the comma before faintly either because you are continuing the sentence. "know" should be no.

Finally there all reunited ,
outside heavens pearly gates.

- there should be they're - they are.

Sad and touching poem about grief and loss and the need to be reunited with the important people who you love and do not want to live without. A few errors to be fixed, but then it will be a great poem which I am sure will touch many readers.

This is so wonderful. It brought tears to my eyes. The punctuation throughout this is kinda funky, but other than that, the wording, the emotion - it's literally beyond words for me.

Exceptionally written, my darling.

What a brilliant ending! That second stanza, finishing "love Mummy" is gut wrenching! At least there is some peace at the end. More brilliantly varied writing, Tony, and the best trilogy of poems I've read on this site. Would nominate if I could. Truly enjoyed these and will come back to them. straight 5 from me.