Comments : With This Wine

  • 11 years ago

    by sham pulok

    Nicely written........ last 8 line awesome

  • 11 years ago

    by Stephen

    Wow this is so very dark, yet it shines beautifully because of your talent!! I loved reading it, Your descriptions were vivid, as I could imagine everything happening stanza by stanza.

    Letting the joker queen out to the world ,
    For they would only see a woman not yet broken down,
    While I kept the lie up with every strenth I had in me

    This is my favorite part of the poem.. I love how you write "letting the joker queen out to the world, for they would only see a woman not yet broken down."...

    To me, this basically expresses you putting up a fake persona to the world so that everyone around does not know how hurt you truly are.. Great poem, amazing expression and details..

  • 11 years ago

    by Rebirth

    Awww, I think this is really amazing.

  • 11 years ago

    by yogi73

    The first couple of stanzas read like a diary entry and (for me) lacked some flow and poetic zest. I liked your emotion and get what your trying to convey, but I like my poems a bit more abstract and not so trite. Just not my style...4 stars. thanks for sharing

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    Another enjoyable piece, too bad wine doesn't cure anything though! Except momentary blues...they always return! lol