Wow this poem carries such an in depth message and journey between life and death.
I found the technique of having a similar repetition notion in the first and last stanza was a great element in luring the reader in at the start as well as illustrating with your words the direction this poem will take us. Then ending with a reflection of the beginning and ending it in a powerful way, it made me want to read more. It really is sad that their life was cut short but death takes anyone at anytime. I thought this poem was very well written even for such a touchy life experience.

5.5 from me

You'd be right Samuel, wow that's horrible I'm so sorry to hear that. This poem truly is a witness from the sorrows a heart continues to hold.

The emotions in this piece scream out in ways that are often overlooked.