I love this Chelsey and Darren, it is so creative, yet I feel like there is a sadness here that I don't like seeing, I hope you are both okay and that you know if you ever need to talk, I'm here, although I do hope this is just fictional

Poem wise, it is such an awesome piece of poetry, with the whole idea around alphabets within the pirate theme, you have such a great mind, I'm jealous

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Must love these deep and expressive poems. It`s such a beautifully painted sad story that it leaves one just amazed after reading it. Also it`s just awesome how can you fit in so many beautiful metaphors in just one poem, even more when each one fits perfectly and boosts story's dreamy side with ease. It displays well how one`s dreams and feelings change due to foul actions. Great job you two keep it up ^^.

P.S. Darren I wonder why you aren`t doing this in professional level already, newspapers books or something, you seem to be too good in this to just keep it as hobby.

You keep writing with sad tone Chels and it just kills me to read them. I know things dont always go the way we want them to, but never give up on the possibility of a better tomorrow, thats how I usually like to think.

Sad, happy or funny I just love the way you write!

Where do I start?
Reading this left a mark on me to begin with, not only was the content filled with explosive emotions all the way, but reading through this made me try and analyze the complexity of the situation,
Willfully submitting your mind, body, heart and soul to someone who eventually will betray your trust.
It's not an easy spot to write about but you two made it sound so real! Up the the point where I could see my self being a victim of this! Or even guilty of it too,

As a reader you made me drift into realms of possibilities up to a point where I read this a couple of times already and I still imagine different situations and Outcomes?

I honestly couldn't figure who wrote which part
You are both experts, and not a lot of Collabs play with my mind like this one! 5/5
And an honest applause to you both

Spectacular poem Darren! You and Chelsy make a wonderful team! Keep it up!

This is really beautiful. Poetry is the best way to express emotions & you both have done justice to it.
Really liked it all the way.

all the best and take care

Wonderful guys...:)
Chels and darren, this poem is just amazing.... the poem has flowed very well... It didnt seem to be the work of two people but as if u both just had encountered the same amount of sadness, it created such sad visuals afore me, I ended up with tears....
Wonderful collab guys:)

Wonderful guys...:)
Chels and darren, this poem is just amazing.... the poem has flowed very well... It didnt seem to be the work of two people but as if u both just had encountered the same amount of sadness, it created such sad visuals afore me, I ended up with tears....
Wonderful collab guys:)

Wow! Impressive you two!

Amazing how a collaboration can often bring the very best out of both Poets.

Very impressive. I liked it.

Loved the idea of using the alphabet, very unique and worked amazing for this piece.

Great combination of talent and made a top poem, well done to both of you.

You should try applying for newspaper space once a week or something, this is great and should be in more places than just here.