Comments : Electric Kiss

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    I just love this and congrats on your win liz and a deserved one...!!
    The way you have involved your passion of love with nature is truly amazing.... I am totally at awe with each word.... The poem has drawn such electrifying images afore me that I am left amazed..... I loved every bit of the passion instilled in you and the way you have given it a touch of abstract objects ...

    I never fully understood
    the meaning of the word
    safe until you held me in
    your arms for the first time,

    ^^^
    You managed to give it a subtle start which is refreshing... yes when you find that perfect one, your life unfolds the meanings of a lot of emotions... very soothing..

    at that point I knew God existed.

    ^^
    This one line verse seems apt..

    I can feel lightning strikes
    my heart whenever we would
    kiss and the sound of thunder
    echoes throughout my body.

    ^^

    True enough but describing it in an unusual and creative way is what makes it commendable... I could see sheer passion here...Makes me relate to it a lot... and you managed to describe it well...

    I've always loved that sound.

    ^^

    Brilliant(:

    The vibrations run beneath
    my skin and time ceases to exist
    whenever you are near me.

    ^^^

    Wonderful to the core.... your this verse gives me chills for the person I adore and is true to the word... I wonder how you could describe it so well...

    They say that lightning never strikes
    the same place twice, but in this case

    I welcome it.

    ^^

    Yes you are true about the fact but the end is just amazing... I am lost of words for that... But I truly must say it is amazingly amazing... You have defined love with a new emotion and that is wonderful.:-)

    Keep writing:)

  • 11 years ago

    by tainted melody

    This was so innovative and original, which it is hard to be when you are talking about a love poem since everything has already been said by one person or another lol but you managed it. Great write!

  • 11 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow! What a beautiful poem... and congratulations on the win! This poem really deserved it <3

    I love the simplicity of this poem, but how meaningful and deep it is... I love how you describe the thunder and lightning you feel when you kiss this person... I found it interesting since lightning and thunder usually has a negative connotation, but in this case it's positive since it's describing the electricity you feel when you're close to this person.

    Great job <3

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    I just melted. Wow! This is superbly sweet!