Comments : Underground Life

  • 7 years ago

    by Amy

    For a challenge, wow. I think you have given your competitors a tough time. The ending is just outstanding. The title is indeed eye-catching; it is so different and new to me.
    Just a few things I have noticed:
    I think loveable in the first verse is spelled as lovable. And "Her inner demons are only around,
    for its her future and failure which she fears." Its needs and apostrophe, I believe.
    I see this is categorized as a life poem and it really does show how life is. In the end, those who have suffered will be given a chance; they will be given something more. It is an inspiring and hopeful poem. I love it so much.

  • 7 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    :O

    what can I say?? I have no idea what to say. It is both sad but yet hopeful and at the same time just a fact of life that we go through this roller coaster.

    amazing write, I love it! xxx

  • 7 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Deeply moving and this poem made me think of myself in parts. It's makes me think of the stuggles I've faced and how I've managed to end up still being around.

    I loved how I could peal back the layers of this poem and feel the emotions underneath.

    This was a stunning write that was packed with feeling.

    I wasn't fussed on the title that is the only fault I have.

    5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    I really like this poem! First, the title caught my attention.. I love the title! And titles are important to me :)

    I like that this poem is really descriptive, and how you're describing one person so clearly.. yet as the reader I can imagine the imagery you created.

    I love the concept of her being underground and still trying to find her way back to earth... it just made me think of the paths we go through in life and how it takes time to reach a certain place, maybe spiritually or something meaningful in a way.

    Great job with this poem :)