Temptation

Third line still says 'temp' .. needs to be tempt like Luce said. :)

I like the contradiction of the first line. 'tenderly wild' ... licking the lips tenderly, but wildly... very passionate imagery there.

I like the shortness of this poem, straight and to the point... no complicated metaphors, just feelings.

Dude ...its no secret i love a bit of love poetry and this is awesome!

Im digging the shorter love poems at the moment, i tend to go on a tangent but sometimes the less said the bigger the impact on the reader....this had a big impact, fantastic :-)

Hi Everlasting
your are 100 % right, I am blushing of shame, and it is corrected

There are a few parts that are a bit confusing for me. for instance this

"Stretch my patients temp me,"

Perhaps, you meant
"stretch my patience, tempt me"