I actually really like this...honestly I do!...I didn't know anyone actually owned records apart from me but...it's a good idea! I still have heaps of records but nothing now to play them on haha!!!
Anyway...back to the poem...you have a few little typos here but...I know english is not your first language so....look it over again...if you need some help pm me ok?
I just loved the fact that...records sometimes stuck and you played well with that fact and...of course, every one had a B side which...generally wasn't the best but....you swung that around too....I really liked it!
Thank you for the compliment. This is the first poem i wrote. I was very depressed when i wrote this. Can you please tell me what few little typos were you referring to? I'm open for comments and suggestions for my own betterment.
Thanks a lot!
9 years ago
It wasn't anything major....just your opening stanza that I would like to talk about...
and self-created fantasies
stuck on replay
shuffle my thoughts
record the regrets
and loop the pain
I've just deleted the 's's....for your consideration. Normally I don't like all the I's you have here but....I think it works here....so...I wouldn't change them in this case.