Comments : Our Lullaby (Triolet)

  • 11 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    No comment....Just a Smile :-) xx

  • 11 years ago

    by MyHalozChokinMe

    I LOVE Triolet poems. I really adore the line "Hushing lullabies with a gentle kiss"

    I'm not able to critique this, but I love it, and into my favorites it went.

    This write just makes the heart feel serene.
    Uh, for those that have hearts, that is!

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I have a smile too, really this made me happy:)
    Im so glad you wrote it<3

    I love the idea of the lullaby, it makes us feeel that its warm, and its straight from your heart. I love the form, and everything about it. Awesome job^_^

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni

    This poem is far too beautiful!

    First of all I love the word "lullaby" it feels like one itself because of how melodic it sounds.. and I feel as though the poem is just as melodic, partly because of the form you picked and partly because of your word choices.

    I would probably fail at this form because I know how important it is for the repeating lines not to be annoying, but to complete the poem and this is where I would have problems. Sigh... you're just so good!!

    The whole scenery you create feels really personal, warm and quite sensual though love(and passion) is the essence of it being so sensual(instead of lust). Your husband must have loved this poem, seeing how I'm in awe over it!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Again, you have wrote another form that #i have never heard of or seen before. You make these seem so easy and simple Maple, you are just very talented.

    This poem is very sweet and romantic in a way and I am glad you decided to write this and share it. Well done.