Comments : Daddy's lullaby

  • 8 years ago

    by Amreen

    Oh so emotional FS... I just cried with every bit of word of this... Beautifully emotional sweetheart:)

  • 8 years ago

    by Chelsea King

    Wow...i love this...expecially the unexpected twist at the end..saying that he wasnt alive and with them anymore!! You are a really good writer :)

  • 8 years ago

    by LostWords

    Oh my...you little story writer. WOW!

  • 7 years ago

    by Joanna Ramirez

    Wonderful i love this i love it 5/5 as well

  • 7 years ago

    by yogi73

    So beautiful! thanks for sharing. As a father of a wonderful little daughter...this is a heartbreaking read

  • 7 years ago

    by Roses Bleed

    Ouch. My heart hurts this a bit, but this is such a beautiful story, I love it. Nearly cried with every line, but so worth the read! Definitely keep going! :)

  • 7 years ago

    by Areeba

    Its such an amazing poem (:
    my heart got broken when i came to know that her dad isnt alive :(
    you wrote it so beautifully.. Wonderful job, keep up the good work

  • 7 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    Wow just wow. This is such a beautiful and heartfelt poem. The title fits perfectly and it is sad that this little girl lost her father. I love how you say everything in this poem though. The little girl's memories are very special and I think they will always be there inside her heart. She is such a tiny fragile person and she seems so smart inside. Actually very smart for her age. I think kids have such an imagination that they think what they want. This girl lost her father and the memories are what she wants to keep. The imagery is so amazing though. I can see the whole scene play out. Even the mother cries. Which shows how much they all care for each other. Angels' really do watch over us and it shows you believe that as well. This is a very touching write. 5/5

  • 7 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    Wow.. I dont know how to begin to express how this poem made me feel.

    There is so much here and so much emotion that is used. The ending paragraph really got to me because i got chills!

    I did not know how to take it because the daddy and girl both seem so happy then you realize what is going on and your heart breaks.

    I Found myself pushing back tears as I read this. I absolutely love it!

  • 7 years ago

    by Masked metaphor

    I admire the way you open up this poem with "Daddy daddy! Sing me a lullaby."
    It allows the reader to understand the characters of the poem from the orientation.

    "As she wiggled about in her tiny
    Bed, begging for the sound of his
    Sweet voice to caress her intentive ears."
    ^^
    You have built the atmosphere of this poem quite well with you excellent choice of descriptive language!

    All I can say about this rest of this poem is it is written so well that it comes to life when I read the words. Its description so clear that it is like reminiscing in a memory or a dream. I love its warming nature it is so sweet! I love it my favorite line is...

    "He gave her a patient smile and began to sing the melody of a thousand angels."

    5/5 from me!

  • 7 years ago

    by DarkLight

    I have no words for you, good job.