Comments : Insanity

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Love this!! I love that you used "I fit the bill", an expression I can say I've never heard in poetry before..I also like that you used it to kind of describe negativity when usually that expression is mostly heard in business for someone who fits well for something that could benefit something else...Yet you go on to describe fear and illusions which is something that wouldnt fit the bill for much huh? ..I feel like Im not making sense and Im rambling, but just know I liked this and got something differnt out of it :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Way! I love this. short and to the point. I relate to how you described this and I too would have to " fit the bill " great idea using that term for this. Also... the other way of looking at it is, we are sane, it is the others that are insane :) x

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    Very interesting, almost senryu like in its power. Looking at this makes me think that you have written a poem then deleted all the unneccesary words leaving just those that give you the same message.

    I am going attempt to decipher it, I may be off track but this is how the poem reads to me, what I get from it;

    'I fit the bill'

    To me this is a reference that you are seen by somebody else as what they are looking for, but this is not the real you. You are hiding behind a frontage of idealism, behaving how you expected to behave but inside the real you is at breaking point and wants to come out.

    'spurts of intensity,'

    Now and again the real intense you emerge, or you have to use intensity to keep up the mask, your daily life is fairly mindane you feel you are gowing through the motions, you use your own intensity to keep your mind from popping.

    'illusions'

    Are you seeing everybody the same, everybody is wearing a mask, they are trapped in a humdrum existance, their inner talents wasted just so they can work to survive,

    'frigid fears'

    We are more comfortable with the norm, it is easier to exist as we are not how we would really like to be, no risk taken, our fear of the unknown keeps us down. Frigid can be seen as somebody who is quite insular.

    'trapped steam'

    To me this suggests a build up of emotion, you are beginning to realise you could have done so much more, you haven't had enough opportunities to let of steam. You are playing the 'game of life' following the paths that are obvious rather than those that are out of reach for somebody trapped.

    'Now where's my fame'

    this is the realisation, you know you have so much more to give, you think that maybe life is passing you by, you should be more well known for your hidden talent than you are. This is the turning point, do you carry on with the daily grind, or do you take the leap of faith your heart is yearning for?

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    Great poem, as I said I may be off track but this is how I read it, a sign of a great poem is that it can be many things to many people, just a shame I lost my nomination button because I would have nominated this without a second thought.

    6/5