Comments : Existence

  • 11 years ago

    by MyHalozChokinMe

    Once in awhile, I come across something that makes me feel like the author was sitting in my head when they were writing. lol

    This is one of those "once in awhile" poems.

    I can't tell you how many times I've had similar thoughts while I'm logging hours at the corporate grind. =/

    I dig the entire poem but the very last two lines-

    "Leave the living to others. Your place is simply to exist."

    In my opinion, a powerful finish. Simple and blunt, made me smirk and think "Fook Yeah!"

    AWesome write.

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Ok I first have to mention that I am a huge FRIENDS fan and so having this in your poem is just amazing for me, I have never known anyone to write this in a poem, and make it work so well either!

    The deepness of the poem is very relatable and the emotion you expressed is one I feel often. Living and existing are two very different things, especially mentally.

    I loved how you chose to regret the decisions you did not make as apposed to the ones you did make. This is powerful because by making a decision we can regret it by knowing we made the wrong one. If we do not make the decision and do nothing we will in fact never know what might have been.

    Great thought provoking poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    You took me to the couch with this one... It was powerful... I felt like I was lounging on my sofa watching friends.. awesome word display !

    The meaning is a deep one.. and sometimes we need to feel that security.. awesome write!

  • 11 years ago

    by Anonymous

    Read a book, "A New Earth," by Eckhart Tolle

  • 11 years ago

    by Andrew Packard

    You are wise beyond your years! Existential Dread, Angst!

    Very mature theme!

  • 10 years ago

    by Lemon

    This is amazing! The way you've worded it is very clever, it helps anyone to relate to it. Your vocabulary is amazing. I love this. 5/5 for definite.