Comments : Smiles (Acrostic)

  • 13 years ago

    by MyHalozChokinMe

    Ugh.

    I am horrible when it comes to Acrostics. I think maybe it has something to do with having to conform to the word chosen prior to the write?

    Undisciplined, I am! lol

    Anyway...

    I like how you tie the smile into the strength of the friend, to help guide you through life's...bullshit.

    Only thing I might change, first word...should it be broken into two? Some things, rather than somethings?

    Lovely, as usual Natasha!

    • 13 years ago

      by ah satan 666

      I have a massive childish grin on my face... :D

      Its the first time I've tried an acrostic,
      As like you I'm not a fan of following suit... I like doing my own thing.

      I think your right & its been amended.

      Thank you Cara :)

  • 13 years ago

    by MyHalozChokinMe

    Lol.

    I too, have only written just ONE Acrostic, and par for course with me, I had to post it in the explicit forum.

    My trucker's mouth get's the best of me!

  • 13 years ago

    by Wild flower

    I love this, acrostic, and rhyming awesome, I love it, its honest, and sincere. Well done :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is beautiful! I love it and I think it should be made for cards. It is very uplifting and reminds us that no matter what life brings us, our friends will be there to guide us through and offer support.

    Beautiful! x

  • 13 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    @_@!

    Why didnt i see this before??

    :))) this made me smile this morning with my coffee :))

    You have a great talent in your writing, a very precise pen natasha, and this is a wonderful write, i love to write acrostics, and the trick to getting them is the flow, so as you read thought.it your not thinking about what letter. Your on...this piece flowed beautifully, great write sweety :)

    • 13 years ago

      by ah satan 666

      I can't believe you've just tainted my page... Tut... Giggles.....

      *sighs*

      Its about time Mouseboy!!! (",)

      Thank you for Gracing me with you compliments... Feel free to graffiti my pages... I'll be honoured, as your pen is f**king lethal! :)

  • 13 years ago

    by MyHalozChokinMe

    Okaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay
    I know this isn't my thread...BUT
    (you do have the option to remove it)

    I just wanted to state on record:

    Everytime I see "Mouseboy"
    I get the most ridiculous image
    that includes, a cape, tights, one of
    those skimply old school black tie
    on masks....and cheese.

    =/

    Just sayin.

    EDIT: I don't what the hell "skimply" is. Add it to the Haloz book of ebonics.

    I meant SKIMPY. =)

    • 13 years ago

      by ah satan 666

      Its a friends thread....

      So its staying... All comments are welcome!!!

      LMAO right now, that would be funny to see! :D

  • 13 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Awwwwwwwww this is wonderful! Oh how awesome and precious is thiss acrostic!! Natasha you did a beautiful write here!! love it!

    • 13 years ago

      by ah satan 666

      I'm glad you like it missy....

      When I visit my place of thinking, there is a specific tree I sit under...
      So if I'm struggling with what to say...or getting a sketch out, I take a deep breath and overload on mother natures surroundings...

      You see, my trees roots are strong and long.
      The breeze through the leaves are like gentle whispers of encouragement, as i breath in all of natures beauty and wonders.
      I smile at the idea, that my helping hand isn't far away at all. :) xx

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Natasha, I love this, it is a sweet dedication to two awesome people, but also a poem that all of us could find someone to dedicate it to.

    The flow is really smooth and that is something that I find difficult to achieve in acrostics, but you nailed it, you penned a beautiful piece

    I love it :)

    • 13 years ago

      by ah satan 666

      Now I'm starting to feel overwhelmed :)....

      I've read pieces of yours and I've not had the words to comment... I just kinda stared O.O...wow!!
      You have a powerful kick with loving ink in your pen...
      Thank you missy for your comment :)