Comments : Sorrow Dusk's Whisper

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Was this written for me? If so....yes, I'll meet you in the middle so we won't feel empty anymore!!

    Gahhhhh this poem is exactly how I feel. I can't even.......

    Sigh*

    Let's hug and never let go mmk? Lol
    Ily!

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Wow this poem is amazing, the wording and everything. Im sorry cant put a longer comment now.
    But to you and who ever is the other person, wish you the best<3

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Andrea...This was just a piece that I can't describe how it made me feel.
    It just hit my heart, and I love you too hun,
    I swear I do...and to have a friend like you, everyone needs someone like you.

    Im her for you as much as your there for me.
    Thank you

    x

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I connected through
    the stars in your pocket,
    dripping dew drops
    crossed my face.

    - such an interesting start, i love the idea of stars in pockets, this is very unique and really gets the readers attention.

    You are the other side
    of my midnight,
    as you cry in silence
    I too whisper sorrow,
    we share the same
    moon.

    - this is so sad but also comforting, it is like saying the pain that you feel is shared because they feel it too. The idea of sharing the moon makes it imply that the 2 people here are strongly connected and close to one another, it could be realted to many relationships also from friendship through to love, to parent/child as this would express how they would feel also if either one was hurting.

    In a sorrow dusk's
    whisper, I can feel
    those fingers scribble
    in depth emotions
    synchronizing with my
    hands silhouette.

    - I love this, the idea of the hand writing and then the shadow repeating this with the other person. Like you can both express what is inside in the same way and let go of what the pain inside is through these words.

    Our shadows intertwine
    on the same train tracks,
    leading to a place we call
    emptiness, meet me in
    the middle, we can walk
    it together....

    - ok so I got two different things from the ending, a sad one, and an ever sadder one. The sad one is that you both feel so alone with your feelings but what you are saying is that this is the time when you both need to come together more than ever and be together to go forward. The even sadder one was that you mention traintracks, and then the idea of two people in pain walking up the tracks together, it implys they will both end this pain together. This is perhaps not what you meant but it is what I thought about when I pictured the scene in my head.

    Deep poem but I loved it.