Comments : Final Days of Fall

  • 12 years ago

    by HeavensBlueSea

    Correction: "sweeps sparing none"
    my apologies!

  • 12 years ago

    by Mohan

    This is really cute poem
    keep writing

  • 12 years ago

    by Unknown

    Very nice imagery and wonderful alliteration throughout the piece!

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Haven't been reading nature pieces for a while. This makes me appreciate them again.

    I love how you've cut this into smaller lines, the imagery is more impacting this way in my opinion. With so little words, this literally made me picture the last day of Fall - the sunrise, last leaves falling, birds singing, then it's Winter.

    I see you've pointed the error with "sweeps sparing one." You could go to the 'Your poems' link then edit it. :)