Comments : Omniscient Being 2

  • 11 years ago

    by yogi73

    This is a very well done poem. I can't believe it hasn't gotten more attention. The message is intense. Great story you have told here.

    I felt this line didn't flow quite as well as all the others:
    "Yet we still in awe undoubtedly clutch"

    maybe reword...?
    "Still in awe, we undoubtedly clutch"
    just my thoughts.

    I'll dig into more of your stuff.