Comments : Ice

  • 11 years ago

    by Max

    But the sun never stop shining, does it?
    I like the poem but I am much confused about what meaning those beautiful words hold, I am not sure if it is you are remembering a person or having a nice moment that you wish you could stop the time so you can have a chance to spend more time like that in the very same state of happiness but you can't keep hold of that memory as you are maybe forgetting it and it just goes away taking every feeling relating to it along. yet you wish you could have some more time despite knowing u will never will.
    hmm I might be wrong but I tried.
    anyhow great write, somehow I can relate to a meaning. I like it.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Andrea, This was really moving, so emotional to read my dear, it really was, and I know the meaning behind this piece and it's heartbreaking to read something like this from you, time is precious, there is never enough of it and all good things must end at some point but in the context of this piece, it is truly gut piercing.

    Love ya sweets,
    hugs
    x

  • 11 years ago

    by ah satan 666

    <3

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wonderful and creative. You are spot on with the sadness and the comparison of your emotions with love. And this came out 100 times well. I always love the variety in your poems MT and you score great here as well:)

  • 11 years ago

    by NobodyKnowsItButMe

    "Happy hours fly by and sad hours linger drowsily!"
    well written!

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Have you ever wished to freeze
    time in a snowflake?

    - actually no, I haven't. But you now know what I am going to do next time I see a snowflake falling infront of me. I love this idea so much and was " awwing" over this opening line for a long time before continuing with the poem. It makes such a difference from the wishing on a penny or star metaphors, it is brilliant, it relates to the time of year and coldness and winter and perhaps even Christmas which makes us miss those loved ones and we wish for them to be with us again. Oh Maple this needs to be a quote in itself please?

    Powder crystals fall upon
    lashes of a last minute
    tear drop, and in that
    moment, life grants
    me a few more moments
    alone with my love.

    - This is such a sad but deep and moving moment you have described. It is something we know we take for granteed way too often because quite frankly we get too busy in life to stop and appreciate every small thing, no matter how much we try. This is beautiful.

    I'm loosing him as the snowfall
    breaks for a cool calm,
    holding onto his breathe
    like an icicle in my palms,
    falling memories slowly
    melt
    away

    -again, very moving words and the imagery of this and to know how you are feeling emotionaly it is just heart breaking. memories melting away - that is so sad because it indicates that you want more memories to add to the collection and feel the memory book is not yet complete. You fear of losing the ones you do have, and in time they might become too distant to be clear. I realte to these words so much.

    this is one moment I wish
    the sun would stop shining~

    - I totally understand what you meant by this ( I think ). It is not so much you wish the sun to stop shining because you do not feel happy and bright etc, or that you want to be in darkness. But you want it to stop shining because if there is no heat from the sun, this snowflake would not melt and the memories and love would not fade away. Everything would remain just as it was before and all the pain would disappear. This is what you were wishing for.

    This is such a deep write Maple, I relate very much to the words and the meaning of the poem and as usual, your wording makes it all the more sad because you touch my heart.

    Keep writing these out, your heart needs to let out its tears too xx

  • 11 years ago

    by ddavidd

    I like this poem it inspired me to write a poem about snowflakes pouring like moments.
    One really gets near the paradox here . the paradox of wanting to freeze the warm moments to hold on to them but then they lose their warmth. literally you say opposite, but the battle of warm and cold sustain the same paradox : we could never hold on to anything .

  • 11 years ago

    by Wafaa

    'this is one moment I wish
    the sun would stop shining~'

    For me this^ did a lot.. I kind of fell for this beautiful meaning and adored the whole piece. I think love never melts even in the coldest moments of winter, a snowflake of time will remain forever solid if it held the spirit of love. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by myonlymoon

    Andrea, your peices are always so moving to me, the emotions are so raw and powerful. time really does go by too fast, especially with the ones we love the most. its never enough. i loved this.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    You know, it's strange when a poem makes me cry, and I understand the meaning of this piece so well, In that sense I would also like for the sun to stop shinning so it wont melt the memories and the time you are spending with your love.