Talk about an amazing write! My darling, you are a tallented writer with so much to offer, this poem was expressed beautifully! Just on the line I open my eyes and she them lying, I think u ment see them lying, simple mistake something I would of probably looked over myself. Well done 5/5

Thank you so much yes when you do something your not suppose to do its like hitting someone with your eyes closed and you see how bad your actions affected someone when you open them\
im glad you liked it hope you enjoy my other poems as well

I liked it, your very good at expressing emotions with practice you can be great. Try doing research on poems and structure and you can funnel all of the emotion into something amazing