I can feel it too
I hear it all the time
the sound you describing reminds me of a lonely dying swan's swansong. You have to tune to his majestic pain to be able to hear his soft crying.

Deep, deep, deep piece of poetry right here. I love it!! I love deep raw writing. You can mask all your feelings behind metaphors, but no matter what you say, I feel your true feelings, your pain, your sadness...I can feel it in your rights and all I want to do is hug you for about an hour LOL

Love how you went from a storm to a soft rain in this....when it rains it pours yes, but it also slows down....I think we need to remember that more in hard times..you may get pelted hard at times, but it will slow down, the rain gets softer, and we are allowed to cry....but don't forget about the sun that comes after..even if that sun is just for a day. Embrace it.

I love you and I hope you get what I'm saying to you here without getting personal.
Love you alwayyyysssss and foreverrr!!

In my opinion, I feel this poem holds adifferent kind of sadness, I don't know how to explain that.
Great job as always:)

I like how it starts out, the first four lines are very good!

Keep it up!

~Andrew

Redemntion - redemption??

This poem was so powerful, it came in 2 small parts both so strong but in different ways. The first half hols more darkness and depth and poetic meaning inside it, as if you disguise the feelings you have through metaphors because it is easier to let them out this way..

Then in the end, you just let go and say exactly how it is that it feels for you. Rain and crying always go together to make such strong imagery. It really describes the pouring that occurs inside of us in times od desperate pain and suffering when we cannot see a way out of something.

Small poem, few words, very very big impact as always.

Keep writing xx

As always there's that nature tone in there, always beautiful to read from you...I think the sadness here is deep to the point that its restricted in the poem, I feel more wanted to come out but you held back, there definitely was something that you needed to write.

I don't know how I didn't see this before, its really moving and deep.

:)
x

Hi Hello Mapple Tree, I just have no idea what form this poem could be...but it narrates how a person is expressing the feeling inside. Simple form but the impact is impressive....

Hi Hello Mapple Tree, I just have no idea what form this poem could be...but it narrates how a person is expressing the feeling inside. Simple form but the impact is impressive....

Hi Hello Mapple Tree, I just have no idea what form this poem could be...but it narrates how a person is expressing the feeling inside. Simple form but the impact is impressive....