Comments : Aspirations

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    The positive message within this piece is breathtaking Andrew... The rhyme scheme is spot on.. and I truly admire this piece~

    • 11 years ago

      by Andrew Packard

      Thanks so much! They just come out, but sometimes you are surprised and not expecting what comes out, I guess that's what the poem is about!

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I enjoy the way you rhyme your poems, I can see you kind of started with one thought here and just carried on letting the next thought come also. Each line is like a different thought and holds its own emotion. Very well done.

    • 11 years ago

      by Andrew Packard

      Yeah, I don't like the way it ended. I like to end with a bang and this kind of ends with a fizzle. The original idea behind the poem is how we fall short of what we plan to do and our life doesn't turn out how you want at all. But when I write the poems come out how they want sort of speak not necessarily how I want.