Comments : Allow Me

  • 6 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This is beautiful Chelsey, I love it.
    Great use of creativity as well.
    Xx

  • 6 years ago

    by Rusheena

    This is amazing, so candid and vivid! Very beautiful, Chelsey. <3

  • 6 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This is a beautiful poem chels

    I love your word choice

    Awesome

  • 6 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    When a heart knows the words flow... Chels, you penned elegance here... its billowy... like a cloud.. I visioned you perched on a cloud singing this to the one your heart writes of... this is beautiful!

  • 6 years ago

    by Angie

    Chelz, you write the most beautiful love poems I've ever read... breathtaking piece!

  • 6 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Beautiful. I love the powerful words here that make it so unique... grazing, desires ,exemplifying, utterly etc.

    When we love someone it should be for all that they are.

    "Let my persistence show you the
    worth you hold."

    - I liked this line because it shows the determination to show this person their beauty and their true self when perhaps they do not see it themselves. It shows that in love you take the hardest challenges such as these and with all your power you try to fix it. To show someone what they are really worth and make them believe it is one of life's most precious gifts, it is something they will never forget.

    A symbol that says-
    Cherishable.

    - love your ending, showing what they mean to you and cherishable is such a loving word and creates a clear picture of just how important this person is to you.

    I also like your title choice because you are asking permission to be able to show this person the things above. You are asking for one chance to be able to show them what it is that you see.

    Love it, well done. 5/5

    Good work.