Comments : If It's Not Too Much To Ask

  • 11 years ago

    by myonlymoon

    "If it's not too much to ask
    I would like for you to ask
    Me if I'd like to talk
    Maybe strike another spark"

    This part absolutely melted me... haha. The overall strength of this write and the obvious doubt you've place here is great. You have put your emotions into words well. Very good (:

  • 11 years ago

    by Ares

    I quite enjoyed reading this poem and it is obvious that it came from some real emotions, which is crucial and you made that point very easily.

    Towards the end there were some places where I felt the poem stuttered a bit, the flow wasn´t quite there, but your wording is flawless and you don´t tug and pull at the poem in order for it to become something it isn´t. All in all, a good piece!

    Ares