Beautiful! I know your intent with this poem, clearly, but it isn't just so simple that I want to laugh. The metaphor of being freed with God, I'm assuming, with the necklace being what frees you.
I think it is nice that you can make your own statement with your poetry, but what I really like is your use of imagery. It's dark, and hauntingly beautiful!
"I flail my arms and scream,
until my vocal cords snap, one by one."
I love that! I love the image of them snapping one by one, it is absolutely bone chilling!
And,
"I start to feel the suction,
ripping my skin to the bone." Ripping and suction are such violent words! This is great!

A few lines I have trouble with:
"Wait, is that a ceiling?"
While I like the character in your poem thinking out loud, I think this is too simple. I'd rather read a description. A ceiling fan that is slightly off balance... I dunno. Something stronger.
"My friend had gone, probably went to help someone else..."
I had forgotten about a friend, to be honest. I think it distracts, but maybe there was some kind of symbolism in it?

Anyway, I think the simplicity works in this. It is beautiful, haunting, again. c: Keep this up! I love the chilling imagery you have! So striking! And don't change anything if you like it. My opinion doesn't matter if you are satisfied c:

-z

Oh wow i love this poem the flow is VERY nice in some part but others to me seem a bit forced but hey it's just me the emotions in there are beautiful the way i saw each and every since picture really blew me away! :) i really did love it and my favorite part is the ending nice way to get out of a place with a necklace!!!! 5/5

Queen Ashlin