No comment really.
The emotions this poem holds are so powerful<3
Amazing job as usual:)

Love it! This is beautifully horrifying, especially because of the calm tone of the speaker.

Andrea, I know the ache of your heart gets some release when you write, though I would love to see something a little more uplifting from you...but this was just beautifully written and it was sombre and calm, it had this natural flow to it, but the title was dark and sent chivers down my spine, like that last line...

Hugs and love, chin up sweets
x

Ok - so this poem has 2 meanings for me. The one in which I think you meant by it, and then the one which my heart seemed to find and connect to. 2 very different situations.

On your version I see it as death calling and defeat. And how time is passing so quickly and the fear is really playing on your mind, I can see the desperation of wanting to freeze every moment but not only to remember them but to keep them alive forever more. This is so very powerful and touching. The idea to keep someones smile alive is so strong and makes me wish we could!

The other version I took from it was from my own point of view. In that a victim is forever hanuted by the voice of their abuser. They constantly have a voice echoing there and especially in your opening stanza, to me it realtes to having a flashback and just how long you can be trapped inside it for.

Then the way we lose ourselves because we give in to their power and sometimes it becomes hard to fight them. It is like their voice is so strong that we fear very soon it will win and it will defeat us and they get their own way.

Both versions though, I picked up the same thing which to me is the most important part of the poem. That it is written from a third persons point of view. So it is you that is witnessing this and can do nothing about it even though you wish to protect them from it. This is what is heart breaking about it because we can all feel this pain and it makes us want to reach out to you and hug you.

Keep writing them out xxx

A very deep poem with a lot of pain from your heart.