I quite like narratives like these. I have done something like this in the past and for me this way of creating is really theraputic.

I admire your way with words and how you manage to create a flow and beat that doesnt seem forced or false. A great read and my first 5-rate of the day :)

Ares

Oh, this is good...actually it is brilliant...you really penned the feeling of loving someone who doesn't love you back...and how you know you should just forget them and not clinging to something you'll never receive but you just can't let go.

It is brilliant...your way with words and that tone you have when you just have to pen those thoughts, like they are scrambled and running onto the page a hundred words a second...

:)

Chels! I loved this, especially the last stanza- it was so good. Your poems always make me feel warm! <3 xoxo

Couldn't say it better even if I tried!! You captured the whole feeling of one sided love, its ugly and I really hate it >_<

But your piece is amazing :)

Perfect. Actually, more than PERFECT.

I just love how you didn't go so descriptive and was satisfied with short to medium lines. This gave power to your words, for such messages need such pace!

I think that this is the best piece I've read from you so far. It's full of miscellaneous emotions, and the format is spectacular. Just the kind of pieces that gets my full attention.

I just can't say more. I hope this WINS :)

Oh this one I can so relate to and I truly mean that... fell in love with someone who didn't feel the same, it broke my heart, yet I didn't want to give them up cause they were my best friend too...

Love it... very well penned Chelz