Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is a delicate and elegant love write! It's almost as if its about distant lovers... cross the other side of the world... one sleeps the other is in the light of day..

What a precious write... the ending simply tops this small and beautiful piece off to a tee! Love this!

Why I do believe she's nailed it lad, what say you mate?? Hahahahah

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Your opening was amazing. Using the rise and set of the moon and sun to desribe your love. Amazing 5/5

I like this a lot, it speaks with the delicate caress of love amongst the sun and moon. Very well said.

I bask in the beauty of a
midnight moon while the suns rays
wraps it's arms around you.

- having the moon and the sun together is so powerful and you have made it work really well here to offer the mood of the poem and the romance and comforting tone. Well done.

Draped in silver I reject
opening my eyes,I can not let
you vanish from my side.

- keeping your eyes closed here makes the moment last for longer and so it wont end. This perhaps could be because they are not really there and so when you open them it will become reality that it is not true.

One day the suns beam will
caress us simultaneously,hand in
hand waiting for the rise of-

our love.

- really love the idea of love rising, like the sun. Very well worded and I like the slight mystery this poem holds in the way of if this person is really with you and you do not want the moment to end, or whether they are gone and you are dreaming this.

Beautiful xx

This is a very beautiful well written poem. The metaphor play in this is amazing. :). 5/5

Well suggested, Tony. Beautifully written. The second stanza is lovely. 5 from me.