Comments : Constants

  • 11 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    This poem surely got lots of meanings,
    it talks about life in a sense, in a sad way.

    my fav stanza is

    "be sure in time if
    Life won't catch you
    Death surely will"

    I can't find anything wrong with it, its just really good.. well done keep it up.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Flowers dry and memories stay
    locked up in boxes for
    years upon decade

    ^^ I am not sure but I think it will read better if the "for" goes to the next line, like this

    Locked up in boxes
    for years upon decade.

    I thought it might have been arranged like that just to make th second line longer and the third one shorter. Or perhaps that's the way, you want it to be read. Thats why I am unsure but it's no biggy.

    Also the one about

    Lovely thoughts play
    Hide-and seek-
    But I never find.

    I think it should have a them? You never find the lovely thoughts, they hide so well.

    I like the flow of the piece and some rhymes that added a semi melody to the poem. Though, it has this tone of resentment or something similar to that at least the way I interprete it and felt it.

    Good.

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    Lindy, you are amazing with this piece. This piece makes me ponder on the memories I have for the gone death times and I loved the way you creatively described the title.

    Keep penning:)