I've just read a few of your poems but I thought I'd comment on a piece with no comments. This is remarkable. The wording is different and it's exceptionally deep. I could picture the scene you were describing. It's a very sad imaginary.. I think this deserves more attention :-)

Danika.

This is really good. I wonder why few people made comments bout this. Its simple yet very interesting. I like the part where you talked about the smoking thing. Great.