Comments : When you don't have love trap

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Love enters your heart
    as a fancy character
    filled with butterflies

    ^^ this part sounds good.

    and can leaves it as a soul
    when migrating its body

    ^ the part about and can leaves it sounds awkward.

    may be leaves would sound better as" and can leave it as a soul" or just " leaves as a soul"

    love enters your heart
    as a fancy character
    filled with butterflies
    and leaves as a soul
    when migrating its body.