Comments : Symphony of the white walls

  • 10 years ago

    by Masked metaphor

    House on the shore of the black water
    ^^
    I love the way you began this poem, so descriptive and alluring! drags the reader straight into the scenery.
    sink , slowly into the void
    ^^
    Not only are you drawing in the reader but you are also making the reader feel the poem by the words sinking slowly and void amazing imagery!
    back at the front door
    the memories moan
    ^^
    I love how you said memories moan so deep and reflective and it also creates a metaphoric imagery the reader can see and feel!
    whilst the nothingness within me roar
    ^^
    this links close to home with me, the anger inside can be so much to bear at times
    awesome poem!
    short sweet and so deep
    5.5 from me