Comments : Maggie

  • 12 years ago

    by Daylight Lucidity

    This is a great poem, however, there is one thing you missed in one of the last lines.

    I want you, I need you, but yet I never get the chance to you mine,

    ^^^ I think you forgot the "make" in between "to" and "you." Other than that, I really enjoyed this and the use of the gods. :) nicely penned 5/5