Comments : Emotions

  • 10 years ago

    by WintersAngel

    You seems to understand a humans emotions more than most. Excellent write and great flow.

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    You make an interesting point with this piece but the rhymes feel abit forced and this damaged your flow quite a bit. The word choice was interesting however it didnt quite do the message much justice. Your perspective and meaning were well written and really set this piece apart from many others. It just seems like this holds more potential than is shown.

    All in all a very decent write

    • 9 years ago

      by bob

      Thanks for your comments - I wrote it for a friend of mine - she wanted to donate part of her liver to a distant relative and her husband didn't want her to - he was afraid she would not survive the operation and was acting crazy - even threatened the doctor. They almost divorced but another donor came forward that was a better match and things calmed down.