Comments : Midnight Solace

  • 10 years ago

    by Mohan

    So nice

  • 10 years ago

    by Britt

    You're welcome, and thank YOU for writing something so darn beautiful.

    I love the opening stanza with the Cuban beats. I thought this challenge was a bit hard because I didn't expect the topic to be the actual dance itself, but inspiration from a movement or culture, and you nailed that here.

    The third stanza brings in the sensual side, so you really hit all aspects. Of course you write something sad, but still managed to make it spot on with the challenge. Versatile. :) I also like how you added the fruit into the poem here.

    That fourth stanza is amazing, the pirouetting cherub (did he bring you to a toe-curling heaven? hahah!) was a really interesting image/thought and I LOVE that you had so many different ideas.

    Half the time I don't read this as sad except for the fourth line in the first stanza with "wistful walls". I like how this can be thought of in different ways, depending on the way the reader reads. Beautiful job (as always!).

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Tonight you will live for tonight, not for yesterday or tomorrow. You will remain care-free and will not let anything bring you down. Love the Cuban reference!

    I like how you used the metaphor of the revived old song, it shows a rekindling of a relationship, maybe just for this night... but this night is about being care-free so it doesn't matter. The mention of the candle light flickering sets a nice, romantic scene!

    I love this stanza, you still wear his scent like an apple wears red, absolutely brilliant part there. And then the wearing his tie... just great imagery here.

    I love the use of 'pirouette' .. one of my favorite words ...and then the use of cherub for love.

    The ending is where the sadness kicks in... the realization that tonight was only for tonight and that it will be your last 'dance' together.

    Wonderful piece, you took the dance prompt of the Cha Cha and made it your own!

  • 10 years ago

    by Sourav

    You've used some nice metaphors here. Quite nice imagery and the second stanza is really awesome. Enjoyed a lot!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "I found I really liked the mention of being free spirited in the first verse as I believe dance and music have a way of healing us, soothing us, and making us feel more alive than ever. The mention of being free spirited reminds me that I love how it's referenced that the author wears his scent still, scents can bring so many memories to us and often we forget just how powerful and triggering scents can be. I like the use of "pirouetting" as so often we see twirl or twirling etc so that was a refreshing change to see. Adore the closing lines, as I originally thought the author was describing a present dance and not a previous one, so that was something that I wasn't expecting and was a nice little twist for me."

  • 10 years ago

    by Mimed Lovette

    Haha I am on a reading spree of your poems and I realised I have not read these poems when you are one of my favorite poets! Oh gosh, so much that I am missing.

    Loved this poem, as usual. I am constantly amazed by your way with words, as if they just come up to you: little soldiers waving their arms around waiting to be picked in your next poem haha.

    "as my hips;
    like a pirouetting cherub,
    whirl in a maelstrom of memories,"

    I loved this imagery. Fancy you coming up with something so gorgeous in seemingly straightforward poem challenges.

    Please write more for readers like me! :)